>>>>Hi,
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>>>>I am writing the release notes of our iOs app and I want to use the word 'mobile' somewhere in the description. I am looking for suggestions on how to use this word. Here is an example of a sentence where I am attempting to use it:
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>>>>The app will eliminate the paperwork, allowing the staff to process the orders remotely in
a mobile mode. The last phrase, in bold font, is what I don't like and need to change.
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>>>>TIA for any input.
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>>>The app will eliminate the paperwork, allowing the staff to process the orders remotely
using a mobile device?
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>>Sounds excellent. Thank you!
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>Naive me asks remotely from what and is the elimination of paperwork caused by working clientside with an electronic device or is it the automatic result of the app electrocuting all paper workers...
Electrocuting all paper workers would provide even greater savings (besides eliminating paperwork) in payroll, benefits, and other expenses.
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